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Arts & Leisure => Pokemon Stadium => Reading and Writing => Topic farted by: PezClock on December 10, 2012, 07:14:23 PM

Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: PezClock on December 10, 2012, 07:14:23 PM
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Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: I1I1I1I1I1I1I11111I1I1I1IIIIIII1I1I1I1I11I on December 10, 2012, 09:48:16 PM
Sayed
Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: PezClock on December 10, 2012, 09:57:13 PM
Quote from: MightyBooshClock;1932874Sayed

what do you mean by sayed?
Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: I1I1I1I1I1I1I11111I1I1I1IIIIIII1I1I1I1I11I on December 10, 2012, 09:58:52 PM
But really, that was just terrible. No coherent plot, bad grammar... Just... It was like trying to read the imagination of a mentally I'm a edgy teen person. I wouldn't have been surprised if you had originally written it on the back of a coloring book with crayon.

That was not good dude.
Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: pop-tart on December 11, 2012, 12:11:17 AM
Adriboosh.. the last time you belittled the Alphaman you spent a month sleeping with bacon. How about presenting your feedback in a more productive tone, dude?
Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: Lump Clock on December 11, 2012, 12:54:05 AM
Quote from: pop-tart;1932886Adriboosh.. the last time you belittled the Alphaman you spent a month sleeping with bacon. How about presenting your feedback in a more productive tone, dude?

:this:
Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: PopcornClock on December 11, 2012, 05:10:48 AM
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Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: PezClock on December 11, 2012, 02:24:47 PM
Quote from: MightyBooshClock;1932878But really, that was just terrible. No coherent plot, bad grammar... Just... It was like trying to read the imagination of a mentally I'm a edgy teen person. I wouldn't have been surprised if you had originally written it on the back of a coloring book with crayon.

That was not good dude.

Thanks. I will work on my grammar, if my mind doesn't tell me to not add commas!
Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: pop-tart on December 11, 2012, 02:48:44 PM
Don't thank Fauxblob. He's not being helpful.

Your spelling and structure will get better as you get older. Overall, this shows a lot of creativity & imagination and that's more important.

I think this story would be a great Flash movie actually. It's like a big acid trip. People turning into cookies and clouds and shit. That's dope.
Title: I wrote a short little fantasy story.
Post by: PezClock on December 11, 2012, 03:44:48 PM
Quote from: pop-tart;1932932Don't thank Fauxblob. He's not being helpful.

Your spelling and structure will get better as you get older. Overall, this shows a lot of creativity & imagination and that's more important.

I think this story would be a great Flash movie actually. It's like a big acid trip. People turning into cookies and clouds and shit. That's dope.

It ain't supposed to be a acid trip. You should try revenge of the sunfish though, that's one spooky acid trip game.