Well, I know I'm going to get stoned to death by you people, but I decided that any attention is good attention. Constructive criticism is openly welcome. Wow, I haven't been on in a while.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-5VwAjQNH_0
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Yeah I know, not very funny, not original, no blue polo shirt.
that was so stupid lmfao
Quote from: Hyundai Clock;1589108that was so stupid lmfao
Thank you, thank you.
was that your dad
are you the next spock
why is that house so plain
aeropostale
what the fuck a red couch
Quote from: Joey;1589111was that your dad
are you the next spock
why is that house so plain
aeropostale
what the fuck a red couch
The guy on the laptop is my dad
Probably, I'm very handsome
That house is a rental beachfront mansion like thing in North Carolina
That's not me, that's a /b/tard actually
Red couches are pretty cool
That was so fucking awful
yet i loved it
Quote from: SeedClock;1589119That was so fucking awful
yet i loved it
Ha-ha love triumphs.
Hi I'm ThorClock and here are my complaints
- Work on the timing of your cuts, so that the viewer doesn't see someone turning away from the camera or laughing after they're done delivering their line. Also when you were doing quick cuts ("cleaning your...") you seemed to be speaking slower than before, which detracted from the overall effect.
- The blue polo shirt may not seem important, but it sort of is: huge text on t-shirts draws attention away from faces, gestures, the "product," etc.
- Shots that were meant to seem as if they were taking place in other buildings looked as if they were all shot in the same building (probably because they were.) If you can't overcome this obstacle by shooting elsewhere, choosing incongruous-looking rooms for the action, or being creative with the scenery, write so that you don't have to use a number of different settings.
I didn't think it was that funny, but it wasn't really awful. I'm sure I'm leaving out a bunch of smaller things to complain about but I've probably said enough already.
Quote from: VCRClock;1589121Hi I'm ThorClock and here are my complaints
- Work on the timing of your cuts, so that the viewer doesn't see someone turning away from the camera or laughing after they're done delivering their line. Also when you were doing quick cuts ("cleaning your...") you seemed to be speaking slower than before, which detracted from the overall effect.
- The blue polo shirt may not seem important, but it sort of is: huge text on t-shirts draws attention away from faces, gestures, the "product," etc.
- Shots that were meant to seem as if they were taking place in other buildings looked as if they were all shot in the same building (probably because they were.) If you can't overcome this obstacle by shooting elsewhere, choosing incongruous-looking rooms for the action, or being creative with the scenery, write so that you don't have to use a number of different settings.
I didn't think it was that funny, but it wasn't really awful. I'm sure I'm leaving out a bunch of smaller things to complain about but I've probably said enough already.
That was actually quite helpful. Well you see, scenery is a no go, and everyone was sleeping, and it's storming out. And all my clothes are packed away, as I'm leaving this place in the morning, because I actually thought about changing my shirt. Thanks for the constructive crit!
Edit: on one part, I did have to keep a laughing bit at the end (the "I don't have to buy guns" part) just because I liked it that way, but the rest was sloppy and careless editing.
that was bad. but not in a bad way. in a funny way. I like that whole, done in your bedroom with some help from your dad aspect.
i laughed and laughed
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I like this guy better.
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and that is how you use autotune, class over
I agree with VCR clock. Not great, not terrible. Nintendos video is a perfect example of the power of understatement and deadpan to make "lol so randum" humor actually work.
I liked the hooker jokes though. Nice to have an recurring gag.
there was a good concept there but the execution was not so much, still not bad
Thank you one and all. And yes, Nintendo's is probably the best parody I've seen.
Quote from: SwirlberryClock;1589231Thank you one and all. And yes, Nintendo's is probably the best parody I've seen.
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shiny nose
I have a slapchop btw
Bonk
cleanin' ya buttah lolololololololololol
so awful, i lol'd. the clean your butter shit was so fucking terrible i laughed my ass right the fuck off
That guy in the first video is awfully fat and sweaty.
What guy?