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This is a tale inspired on ClockRadio's "quest for true love". People say I'm quite a good reader and I've won some contests waaaay back but it wasn't in english so I don't know how things are gonna turn out but all i can do is try.Some musicians i know will help me recording this eventually with their HQ mics although i never properly recorded my voice so far;nevertheless i think it won't be Epic Fail. My idea for clockday 2010. Please help me out by correcting all grammar and vocabular mistakes, suggesting better words/phrases here n there and  telling me what you think. Shanks


After Strawberry has wandered this world for decades in his search for true love, one day he stopped.
He couldn't believe that all his efforts to find something that simple had not beared any fruits yet.
"If i can't find true love", he said ,"I should try finding true hatred (hate?). They are forever doomed to stick together, like day and night, one couldn't exist without the other. The moment I find true Hate, true love can't be far away."

And so he began to walk and listen to the rumors of the people.
There was a small group of extraordinary individuals who practiced the fine arts.
However, they were hated by common people.
Strawberry approached the people. "Why do you hate these men?"
"Because their so called art is plain shit"
Strawberry looked at their crafts. They were beautiful.
"Your hate is not pure. you hate because you're too afraid to tell the other which glorious pleasure you feel while watching their crafts. I feel nothing but despise towards you, cowards."
He spit on the people and moved on.

He came across a creature which was held in iron chains, raging violently, screaming incomprehensive bits of speech.
"What's with him?", asked Strawberry the guard.
"This is a Monster!", the guard replied ,"He killed 20 men before we could put him in chains".
Strawberry looked at the beast. He saw the truth.
"His hate is not pure. He is a monster because you treat him as one"
Strawberry approached the monster, unlocked the chains and gave him to eat.
The creature kneeled down before him, crying in awe of the great Strawberry.
"I feel nothing but pity for you, poor thing."
He ignored the speechless guard and moved on.

He came across a nobleman who was about to be hung.
The crowd was yelling and throwing rocks at him.
"This man is guilty because he surpressed the people and put up high taxes, making it impossible for us to live. He shall now die by the rope!", announced the executioner.
Strawberry looked at the crowd and at the nobleman.
He stepped up to the Executioner and spoke to the people:
"Your hate is not pure. You are all afraid of choosing your own destiny and therefore you want to be lead by others. Release this man, he is nothing but a scapegoat for your own insecurities"
Everyone was quiet.
"I feel nothing but shame for all of you", said strawberry and moved on.

He had soaked up so many negative emotions. He had desperately sought true love and hate his whole life but he couldn't find either.
A blind rage blocked his view.
A passionate fire burned inside of him.
He took an innocent white sheet of paper.
And he took his own hate infused red blood.
He made a stroke for the Cowardice(?).
He made a stroke for the Hyporcrisy(?).
He made a stroke with his pure Hate towards everything.




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