goo

[ShastaClock]

So I decided to try writing again or whatever. Here is a small sample of something I'm working on. Whatever.

Goo.

Chapter One.

   Well, it's the end of the goddamn world. Okay. This is something I can handle. I can wrap my head around the idea that in just a short amount of time, the entire world will cease to exist. I imagine a normal person would be freaked out about the whole situation. However, this just isn't the case for me. For two reasons. One; there's a reason why in your typical disaster movies they always show a major city being destroyed. It's because that's the only possible way the apocalypse is in anyway interesting. Which brings me to point number two: the end of the world is painfully dull. Once again I feel it's the fault of Holly-Wood, but how can you not feel disappointed about the fact that instead of giant fuck-off aliens, you're left with nothing but tiny particles of matter slowly dominating all of civilization? Let me explain.
   I guess the story goes that some big shot scientist decided it would a great idea to attempt to make strange matter. What this stuff is, essentially, is matter that can “take over” other kinds of matter. Essentially, this shit turns shit into itself. Buildings will eventually turn into strange matter, the air will eventually turn into strange matter, and even your goddamn dog will turn to strange matter. This is a major problem. The good news is, the strange matter moves at a much slower rate than the scientists predicted. So instead of the world ending in a time-frame they can conceive; they essentially have no idea when the fuck it could happen. The bad news is, not only do they not know when it's finally going to all end, but there's no way to possibly stop it. How the fuck would you even try? At least, that's what I've been able to understand so far after reading a couple of articles on Wikipedia. Once again I must reiterate that I live in the middle of nowhere, and the people out here have decided it's just best to ignore the whole “end of the world” situation.
   Except “ignoring it” is probably the wrong expression to use. I should say “those poor fucks don't know what hit 'em”, because I also forgot to mention that not only do I live in a small town, but I live in a small town where ninety percent of the population consists of the elderly. You would have no idea that every single atom in the universe is about to turn into goo any day now. Hell, the news last night ran a piece about the oldest living member of the city turned one hundred and two. I don't doubt that the reporters know what the fuck is up, but I guess they don't want the elderly to panic. Can you imagine what three-thousand decrepit people all collectively shitting themselves would be like? I bet the reporters sure as hell did.
   Everyone else in town seems to be in a state of denial as well. Or they're just ignorant about the whole situation, I'm not really sure. I tend not to talk about them, as they're all so wrapped up in their miserable lives, it's become impossible to converse about anything. I know that sounds mighty foolish for me to say, but if you lived here I'm certain you would understand.
   So what exactly does a man of my meager status do during the shit-storm that is the end of the world? Nothing. I do best to stay informed of the situation through various on-line media outlets, but last I heard the goo hasn't even hit the states yet. Leaving me time to finish doing fuck-all.

[pop-tart]

Nice concept.

As for the style... if you're looking for feedback... I don't know.. something's tripping me up. Paragraphs don't break right or something. Can't really put my finger on it.

Also, (and this is just me) I'm a big proponent of never overusing the same word in a paragraph... even if it means going to thesaurus.com and looking for alts. Or even omitting a word if the word doesn't add to the context. You used 'essentially' 3 times in the second paragraph. Popped out at me for some reason.

Like the story though. Keep it going!

[ShastaClock]

Nice concept.

As for the style... if you're looking for feedback... I don't know.. something's tripping me up. Paragraphs don't break right or something. Can't really put my finger on it.

Also, (and this is just me) I'm a big proponent of never overusing the same word in a paragraph... even if it means going to thesaurus.com and looking for alts. Or even omitting a word if the word doesn't add to the context. You used 'essentially' 3 times in the second paragraph. Popped out at me for some reason.

Like the story though. Keep it going!

Thanks. I've been trying to just get the story going. Ive been having a hard time writing this for some reason, so I've been typing out the beginning over and over to see where I get.

Thanks for the feedback, guys. I wasn't sure if I should bother with this or not.

[Silly Putty Clock]

I like it. The premise reminds me of the ending of Cat's Cradle.

[ShastaClock]

I like it. The premise reminds me of the ending of Cat's Cradle.

I have (sadly) never read that. I've been reading "Atlas Shrugged" and "The Picture of Dorian Grey" to get inspiration. Oh, and "The Idiot's Guide to String Theory".