Bond Of Clocks: Rough Sketch

[Alpha]

11 Clocks, Orange, Strawberry, Leaf, Pineapple, Apple, Bananna, Carrot,Zipstyke, Dew, Raspberry,
and Grape are soldiers who enlist for the Lock Vs Clock war. IT is World War III. The allies are
Clock Crew, Barney Bunch, Block Band, Star Syndicate and the axis are Lock Legion, Glock
Group, Dock Division, Plastic People, and the Uzi Union & kitty Krew. The Eleven soldiers all enlist
onto the Clock Crew for that is where they were born. It was the year 2000.
They all learn about the Nuclear Technology and the ingrediants to it. They all pass training
and when they are ready to go for war Bannana escapes in a plane admitting he was a Lock
and brings the Nuclear Ingredient with him.
When there plane is ready to drop the now 10 troops the plane is hit by a shell and Grape: The
squad's leader is killed and Zipstyke's hand is burnt black. Everyone jumps and the remaining
nine soldiers all survive it. But they are seperated in 3 groups of 3. Apple, Raspberry and Carrot,
also Leaf, Pineapple and Orange and lastly Strawberry, Carrot and Dew. Strawberry is put in
charge since he was originally second in command. Eventually they all meet up but Zipstyke
has been shot in the foot by a Lock Legion member. They take as many Locks as they can
with them but it gets to crowded and they go to take 1 of 2 of Lockepedia's military towns.
They take the first one succesfuly and to take the second they must cross a tank guarded bridge.
Dew, being the oldest climbs in one of 3 tanks and shoots the driver and shoots a second driver.
The other 8 watching from behind a hill realise Dew has no way of getting that final driver.
Dew has no choice but to light his TNT and dive into the tank killing him and the tank.
He does exactly this. They cross the bridge but 3 more tanks come. Pineapple lights his and
Orange's TNT to blow up the bridge behind them. There are to many Locks guarding the final
town so the Clocks climb to the top of a skyscraper and snipe them out. Strawberry, Orange
Zipstyke and Raspberry are the only ones with Sniping experience. Zipstyke is to injured
and Raspberry is afraid of heights. Orange and Strawberry need help as being outnumbered.
Raspberry overcomes his fear and snipes out all the locks but one last one snipes him over the
edge of the apartment building. They start taking the town with bad luck as hundreds of locks
are closing on the 7 remaining Clocks. They must dash through the field. Strawberry
leads his men through the field as machine guns and tanks are firing at them and Zipstyke
is shot a fourth time in the knee and falls. Also Leaf is hit in the head and the Crew knows
he's dead for sure. Carrot even checks and that statement proves true.
The supposedly remaining 5 soldiers make it through and bomb the artillery bases successfuly.
As their about to head on to the final mission, sneak by lock tanks and cut off lock Legion
supplies when Zipstyke emerges from an old creek with a burnt hand, bullet in his knee,
bullet is his chest, and one in his arm.
Two tanks block there path and the 6 clocks cannot pass them. They need a distraction.
Zipstyke, ready to die after four injuries, begs to go to heaven. He runs in front of the tanks
and runs away leading the tanks away the crew cries for they may never see him again.
They find there former allie previous enemy Bannana's body. It was hit by his own mine.
They are half happy half sad for he may have been a spy but he had been there friend.
The crew sneak past a final tank and fight four 5 men lines of locks.
Also a tank is with these lines. The clocks kill the first two lines successfuly. But 5 clocks
is not enough to do the job. The 10 locks all fire at Apple who is reloading his gun.
He's shot in the shoulder while the other 4 are killing them.They have a quick flash
back of all that has happened to them so far.
The remaining 5 locks are firing and one snipes out Apple.Strawberry can't stand
the memories of his other men that have died in this journey and yells at the tank
to shoot him and the tank blows him in two. Orange takes out the remaining 5
while Carrot distracts the tank and pineapple hops on and throws a grenade in.
They had won the war and were ready to go home. They lived on to be Veterans
and the three won the Medal of Honour and several other awards.
Grape-Killed by shell
Dew-Killed by TNT
Raspberry-Sniped By Sniper
Leaf-Killed By Machine Gun
Bannana-Killed By Mine
Zipstyke-Killed By Unknown
Apple-Killed By Rifle
Strawberry-Killed By Tank
Orange-Died July 15, 2040 Age: 60
Pineapple-Died January 2, 2037 Age: 57
Carrot-Died December 21, 2071 Age: 91

[Alpha]

11 Clocks, Orange, Strawberry, Leaf, Pineapple, Apple, Bananna, Carrot,Zipstyke, Dew, Raspberry,
and Grape are soldiers who enlist for the Lock Vs Clock war. IT is World War III. The allies are
Clock Crew, Barney Bunch, Block Band, Star Syndicate and the axis are Lock Legion, Glock
Group, Dock Division, Plastic People, and the Uzi Union & kitty Krew. The Eleven soldiers all enlist
onto the Clock Crew for that is where they were born. It was the year 2000.
They all learn about the Nuclear Technology and the ingrediants to it. They all pass training
and when they are ready to go for war Bannana escapes in a plane admitting he was a Lock
and brings the Nuclear Ingredient with him.
 
 
When there plane is ready to drop the now 10 troops the plane is hit by a shell and Grape: The
squad's leader is killed and Zipstyke's hand is burnt black. Everyone jumps and the remaining
nine soldiers all survive it. But they are seperated in 3 groups of 3. Apple, Raspberry and Carrot,
also Leaf, Pineapple and Orange and lastly Strawberry, Carrot and Dew. Strawberry is put in
charge since he was originally second in command. Eventually they all meet up but Zipstyke
has been shot in the foot by a Lock Legion member. They take as many Locks as they can
with them but it gets to crowded and they go to take 1 of 2 of Lockepedia's military towns.
 
 
They take the first one succesfuly and to take the second they must cross a tank guarded bridge.
Dew, being the oldest climbs in one of 3 tanks and shoots the driver and shoots a second driver.
The other 8 watching from behind a hill realise Dew has no way of getting that final driver.
Dew has no choice but to light his TNT and dive into the tank killing him and the tank.
He does exactly this. They cross the bridge but 3 more tanks come. Pineapple lights his and
Orange's TNT to blow up the bridge behind them. There are to many Locks guarding the final
 

town so the Clocks climb to the top of a skyscraper and snipe them out. Strawberry, Orange
Zipstyke and Raspberry are the only ones with Sniping experience. Zipstyke is to injured
and Raspberry is afraid of heights. Orange and Strawberry need help as being outnumbered.
Raspberry overcomes his fear and snipes out all the locks but one last one snipes him over the
edge of the apartment building. They start taking the town with bad luck as hundreds of locks
are closing on the 7 remaining Clocks. They must dash through the field. Strawberry
leads his men through the field as machine guns and tanks are firing at them and Zipstyke
is shot a fourth time in the knee and falls. Also Leaf is hit in the head and the Crew knows
 

he's dead for sure. Carrot even checks and that statement proves true.
The supposedly remaining 5 soldiers make it through and bomb the artillery bases successfuly.
As their about to head on to the final mission, sneak by lock tanks and cut off lock Legion
supplies when Zipstyke emerges from an old creek with a burnt hand, bullet in his knee,
bullet is his chest, and one in his arm.
Two tanks block there path and the 6 clocks cannot pass them. They need a distraction.
Zipstyke, ready to die after four injuries, begs to go to heaven. He runs in front of the tanks
and runs away leading the tanks away the crew cries for they may never see him again.
 

They find there former allie previous enemy Bannana's body. It was hit by his own mine.
They are half happy half sad for he may have been a spy but he had been there friend.
The crew sneak past a final tank and fight four 5 men lines of locks.
Also a tank is with these lines. The clocks kill the first two lines successfuly. But 5 clocks
is not enough to do the job. The 10 locks all fire at Apple who is reloading his gun.
He's shot in the shoulder while the other 4 are killing them.They have a quick flash
back of all that has happened to them so far.
The remaining 5 locks are firing and one snipes out Apple.Strawberry can't stand
 

the memories of his other men that have died in this journey and yells at the tank
to shoot him and the tank blows him in two. Orange takes out the remaining 5
while Carrot distracts the tank and pineapple hops on and throws a grenade in.
They had won the war and were ready to go home. They lived on to be Veterans
and the three won the Medal of Honour and several other awards.
 
 
Grape-Killed by shell
Dew-Killed by TNT
Raspberry-Sniped By Sniper
Leaf-Killed By Machine Gun
Bannana-Killed By Mine
Zipstyke-Killed By Unknown
Apple-Killed By Rifle
Strawberry-Killed By Tank
Orange-Died July 15, 2040 Age: 60
Pineapple-Died January 2, 2037 Age: 57
Carrot-Died December 21, 2071 Age: 91

[Slurpee]

denny don't plan too much it may not come out right.

[buttplug]

ok

[Alpha]

These are just some overarching problems with the whole thing, obviously there's other things that are more specific, but once you get a little more experience working in flash I think you'll see what I mean.

ok, WTF?! What are you a blind case? Did you even read it? IT's not funny enough? DUDE WTFUCKING SHIT? I'm not a mean guy but this pisses me off. Who the fuck told you it was for flash anyways? Did you even bother to fucking think about this?!
Also don't read the first post that was a bad copy crammed together.

[AC Slater]

ok, WTF?! What are you a blind case? Did you even read it? IT's not funny enough? DUDE WTFUCKING SHIT? I'm not a mean guy but this pisses me off. Who the fuck told you it was for flash anyways? Did you even bother to fucking think about this?!
Also don't read the first post that was a bad copy crammed together.

Hey now, there's no reason to respond in such a manner. He was only giving you an honest critique and citing some major problems with the writing. I don't know why you would post this up and not expect some criticism. He's only trying to help you improve, remember that.

[Alpha]

Hey now, there's no reason to respond in such a manner. He was only giving you an honest critique and citing some major problems with the writing. I don't know why you would post this up and not expect some criticism. He's only trying to help you improve, remember that.

I know, sorry I just get ticked off randomly sometimes.
(Must not've took my meds lol)

[Silly Putty Clock]

I know, sorry I just get ticked off randomly sometimes.
(Must not've took my meds lol)

This isn't funny enough either. Suck less.